All Comments on 'Coming Clean'

"Kate was exhausted. She had worked from early morning to late every night. Added to that was the nearly hour-long commute each way. And she felt she hadn't seen Michael in months, not just days. He was busy too, his office another hotbed of activity."

Simple, declaritive sentences for the under fives. Poor grammar. Everything I'm looking for in a story. Tedious at best.

R., Don't let the sour words from pedantic bother you. He/she sounds jealous to me. I thought the story was great, the descriptions of the couple and their activities were finely done, and believe it or not, I felt satiated when the story ended! Keep up the good writing. I love it!

I wouldn't let one jerk discourage you, Captivate. It's obvious he/she has no taste for good writing. You did a great job with this story, as is typical of your writings. Keep up the fine work!

Bob from Bellevue