All Comments on 'Companion'

A good editor would have given you a better score.

Wow. That's sophisticated stuff. It sure puts the sex in perspective... And it's all the better for that. A great story.

Interesting but twisted. Very cerebral, lots of reflections to absorb not always agreeing with you but the social meaning, your socialist inner-self, made the first part interesting. When Jesse appeared it was more awkward. Interesting writing. Take care of yourself

Thanks for the story. It forced me to think about how relationships are like transactions in some aspects. The power struggle, the need for caring, the desire for freedom - so many feelings, so little time. A most interesting, compelling read. Take care.

Interesting Storyline!

Could have been an excellent "Lesbian Love Story", however pages 5-6-7 were confusing, most likely due to the numerous grammatical errors. This could have been an awesome story with vastly improved editing, as well as a bit more story definition on the final 3-pages.

Quite interesting; provocative. There were times when I simply wanted to stop, but could not - captivating and no less erotic. Hope that you have other stories to share.

....Exhilarating!!!!!

yes, it was a Very...

....Exhilarating

A very thought provoking story. Like everything else, love is transactional once you strip the emotions out of it.

With some better editing, this is a great story.

I found this story to both depressing and not really that sexy or exciting. I find it odd it was confusing, and needed better editing and proofreading. Kind of the worst thing I have ever read here*, and that's saying something. (*Ergo, so much so that this is the first time I have felt like commenting.)

Sorry, but if you are going to write something this lengthy, at least take equal time to proof and engage an editor.

I got confused about who was talking to whom. "she" doesn't cut it when all the characters are female. Seemed messy at the end. Then they ended up in a different place in a blink. I hardly knew what was happening. I don't think there was much love here unfortunately. You can't bring a stranger in and say she's going to be with her. We didn't/don't know her. No connection. What happened to Maria? Basically it was a story of using rich people for there own needs. Not love.

I wanted to stop reading, but I couldn't. So that goes for something. It was a lot disjointed and felt like the writer was not sure of what kind of story was going to be told. I think more writing can help you expand on the flow and clarity of your stories. Intriguing.

Very confusing read, yet I couldnt find it in me to stop reading. Putting aside issues like the disjointed pacing, and the confusing use of "she" that others having commented on, the biggest issue for me is I dont understand who I should care about in the story. After pages of being invested in Maria and their companionship, suddenly Maria is thrown aside and Jessa appears and the story continues as if I should care as much about her as I did Maria... In truth all I feel is pity for Maria, and disgust at the MC for heartlessly thtowing her aside