All Comments on 'Confessions of an Unholy Mind'

But in a good way.....keep up the good work ;-)

It's 'Je t'aime' not J'taime; pedantic I know.

New, fresh, different; an actual story for once! Thank you.

Loved the story, but can't work out why he was so rough on the younger sister.

Otherwise, this had me close to crying.

Awesome job.

This is a 5 star piece if fiction. Early learning remains with us. Here is a personal example: for years after being taught an incorrect word spelling my hand would spell it hat way as I wrote it, and only in rereading my work would I catch it.

I can see the young person, blanking all other sensory information, fixated upon the act of fucking and understanding it as love making. Sometimes the hungry person does not consume bad food for nourishment so much for lack of knowing it is bad. Loved your work! Seems like you intentionally dropped a brick on Mormon's as a culture, but they will survive it.

Keep writing as the ideas come. Whether adult or straight fiction you appear to have a tight control on what moves a plot forward.

and original. Generally incest stories don't do much for me, but this is outstanding.

I imagined Jennifer Connolly as Isis and KKirsten Dunst as Trinity

I came across this piece by accident, but have found it to be well composed and an enjoyable read. Fiction or not I loved it... Not sure about the title but a 5 star all the same.

superb read top notch

......odd/strange (in a good way) to start, then dark, then..... I'm not sure if I was cheated, or not, with the simplistic ending.

But, it was a really well written piece.

And, I'm still ambivalent.

Jon

Thank you for the positive feedback on my story, especially to the named users Eric, Yorkie, Scottie, Danno & Trite. I appreciate the time you took to read, and I am thrilled you enjoyed it and felt it was well plotted and refreshing, certainly a wonderful boost for a first submission.

To the anonymous readers who commented positively, I am grateful for your comments (and I like the thought of Kirsten Dunst and Jennifer Connelly!).

Jon - I'm glad you felt it was well written. I was torn between ending with grand retribution for Mother and Grandpa, and keeping it as realistic (if possible!) as I could. Ultimately, I decided the latter because I am considering another part to this, perhaps from the perspective of another character in the story (whether that be mother & grandpa, the teacher, or Josh). Also, I had just read a bunch of stuff on here that didn't end happily, or was left open, so just felt it should end on a positive. Either way, thank you for the feedback - it certainly gives me some direction for future submissions.

Frank