All Comments on 'Conflicted in Paradise Ch. 01'

I still like Conflicted better, but this is really a good start for a long story...keep up the good work!

i thought just as good as conflicted and should be good contuiation of the story.

It might be nice to read the earlier story you refer to, but your profile lists only this one?

Please repost your stories they were so hot I wish to read them again and have been waiting to see if you would return

Please check my Bio to find where you can read it. It's not online at Lit anymore, as I deleted it.

It's up in its entirety at a different site, however.

its soo good! love conflicted by the way! want to see damon keep all the girls to himself though

Once again the master has spoken.

why bother looking for the other story it obviously wasn't GOOD enough to keep here and had to be deleted.

I liked the story for the most part, but what happened to Vincent? Was he just an opener character, and if so it was a little poorly done cuz i kind of liked him, and then you just dumped him.

It's so long, with so many characters - all perfect looking, all rich, all nymphomaniacs - that I ended up skimming most of the story and giving it a lower score than the actual writing might otherwise deserve.

If we haven't read the first story how are we supposed to know what the relationship between the brother and sister is? And, I know it's erotic fiction, but I'm pretty sure Youtube would have been inundated in seconds with footage of the goings on. And a minor royal? Please.

...threesomes or however this was going to go, so I won't rate it--but I'll tell you before I discovered that angle, you had plenty of detail on the guests, their looks, Vincent, the surroundings, etc. Well-written and good dialogue otherwise.

I realize it's been over a decade, but I keep hoping one day you'll start writing again. Your stuff was top notch.