All Comments on 'Consequences of Pranking My Sister'

You were writing long stories, that's why I don't see you here, most of us skip long stories(multiple chapter stories). 12k - 30k, that's my range, anything above or below, usually i Skip. I'm going to read this, will update review once finished.

Awesome! Just the right speed!

Worth at least 6 stars out of 5. Extremely well paced.

fantastic! Thanks for sharing!

Sorry to the Anonymous reader who can only handle 12k-30k word stories. They have missed out on some true gems. I wouldn't say most of us skip multi-chapter stories either as looking at the hall of fame stories a good many of them are multi-chapter. Your story was well written and well paced. Thanks for the read

Long or short I always enjoy your stories up the garden shed or on the kitchen floor makes no idea to me, they always feel credible to me. That has always been my yardstick if I can believe it could have happened it doesn't matter what here on Lit. or in a novel then you can feel the truth in it, it'll always be five stars from me. Also your tales are always well written. Loved it.

Hot

Wonderful story! Now I'm hard at work!

Dont know how anon1 speaks for most of us. I dont presume to speak for 'most of us' but by the ratings, long and/or multi chapter stories get many reads and good ratings. I loved the story and would be delighted to see further adventures of the two.

TimTam

This was perfectly laid out story, well done!!! Sequel?? Hope so!!

Another good premise.

But the sex seemed to be lacking something.

She's playing with and looking at his cock. Balls? Nothing?

He's fingering her pussy. Then eating it. No comments from her about how well he's doing? No instructions/directions/suggestions about what he might do differently?

No dialog about whether he likes her smell and taste?

No explanation about why she said it was OK for him to cum in her pussy? Was she on the pill? Was she a virgin?

Four stars.

And you need an editor/proofreader:

"although she always complaint that it was cheating." You meant COMPLAINED, not COMPLAINT.

You wrote FOCUSSED. It's FOCUSED.

You wrote PRETENCE. It's PRETENSE.

More hope they get together he gets her pregnant

Loved the story and their interaction

To the last 'Anonymous'

Thank you for your comments and suggestions, I appreciate people taking the time to comment, good or bad.

However, I write in UK English, so you need to google the UK spelling before correcting me or other UK writers.

From the British Oxford Dictionary

"pretence

noun [ U ] UK (US pretense)

a way of behaving that is intended to deceive people:"

"'Focused' and 'focussed' are two spellings of the same word: Focused (one 's') is the standard spelling of this term in modern English. Focussed (with a double 's') is a rare variant spelling, although it is more common in Australian and British English than it is in American English."

Yes I did make a mistake with "complaint", but I doubt I will be asking for an editor/proofreader for one wrong word...lol

As for all your other suggestions, these are the details YOU want to see in a story.

Sorry, but that is not how I write and I prefer to remain true to myself.

I am glad you enjoyed it enough anyway, to give it 4 stars, thank you.

Oh wow what an awesome story. It’s true I believe that most brothers and sisters at least once in their life think about their sibling in a sexual way. I know I sure did after I accidentally walked in on her topless when her and her family were forced to come stay with us due to their house almost getting flooded. The river crested in their front yard. My sister is 11 years older than I am. She was 24 at that time. I have to give this story 10 stars.

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Excellent! Great writing. Thank you.

To anonymous below, you get what you pay for. I'm sure the author would be glad to accept a $500 contribution from you to pay for an editor.

Nah. I'm glad others liked it, but the idea of her allowing unwelcome sexual contact -- when she didn't seem compelled by desire -- for the sake of a game seemed more plot-contrived than believable. In this type of story, the successful author generally makes it plain that the stubbornness over the "word" is just a means for her to get what she actually wanted from very near the beginning. This story was nowhere near first page hall of fame quality as the 4.80 *current* rating would suggest

Brilliant- really do hope theres a sequel as I'd like to see what happens next

Please add a part 2 to this

I loved this!! Also: I prefer long stories so I can get even more invested! ♥️♥️♥️

Great story - idea and execution!

Part 2 comes out when? 4*

This could easily become a series. Very good.

I'm glad you're back at it!

Don't care what some others think, I found this story very sexy and well done. Would love to have had a sister to play "games" with, but that wasn't how it turned out. Five stars, thanks.

This is one of the best and most believable brother-sister 'tickle fight' stories I have read. I am truly sorry that so many this side of the Atlantic have such ridged interpretation of our language. I have never seen similar complaints the other way 'round. It is somehow comforting to know that this unusual sibling relationship is also somewhat universal.

That was a Hot & sexy story. Love the sister being a little older, and mature. Bro just a horny 18YO. Five stars.

Very nice. I can't shake the feeling that I've read this before. No matter, it's really hot. Thank you.

Very erotic!

Hot as fuck

Awesome story, loved it, notwithstanding the 'squelching' which seemed a little out of place

That was incredible, thank you.

I liked the build up.

Definitely among the best stories I've read here

Great story. I wonder if it were intentional that no mention of worry about getting pregnant. Doe she? Sure hope for a chapter two.

Well... someone'll be callin' "Uncle" soon, just not the pranksters.

Well written. One of the best.

I really need more chapters like many of your other stories. You are exceptional at writing new stuff for your stories.

Can't wait for the next chapter

Outstanding story! Really well written! On to chapter 2.

Well told and a firm rating of 5 because she HAS got pubic hair!!!!!! "At that moment I felt our pubic hair touch, my cock buried fully in my sister's warm pussy."

Oh my God, that is one of the hottest stories I have read!

Julie is so erotic. I can see her and I enjoy the moments as they progress in their triste. Amazing work. 5 stars.

Loved it. 5 stars. Julie is amazing. Didn't want to give in but she had to. Well written.

Alright, I'll say it, that was hot. Hard the whole time. I had this crystal-clear image of Julie in my mind and goddamn was she hot. I loved how she slowly succumbed to her building lust and desire for pleasure and release, as the initial reason for all of it - their little game - faded away. Very well done.

My 2nd time reading this story. It is so well written.

While reading I can picture everything taking place.

After reading 3 long terrible stories in row I’m glad to come across this one. Definitely one of my favorites. The slow build up to the final act is the best part of good stories. No slut sister that instantly wanted it and no body builder sex god brother with a laughably large member that gives multiple orgasms. Really a great story.

Nice premise.

Sex a bit rushed.

Not enough reluctance and how it needed to be overcome.

Could have used some touchie-feelie of his cock and balls by her hand/s.

Could have used her doing the rubbing of his cock on her ussy lips and clit.

Four stars.

That was hot! Five stars!

My younger brother and I have just finished reading the Garden Shed series which were sensational. We can't wait for Ch 15. The only thing that was causing a very minor dissonance was that Sue was younger than the brother. (I am the older sister to my brother who is 12 months younger than me). But the "sneaking around" without our parents knowing was absolutely spot-on.

Then we saw this series. Wow wow wow. We have only read Chapter 1 because we are exhausted from all the excitement. This one is even more realistic for us since the ages for both Chris and Julie are are pretty close. And we certainly pulled pranks on each other and had wrestling. We will definitely be reading more of Jasperspen's stories.

Thanks tothe author for some excellent stories

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5 star! Isn't it great how mothers and sisters can find ways to get along. However, there is still room for one more. AC