All Comments on 'Cory and Her Roommates'

This story definitely needs a sequel, I mean you introduced Peggy and she did not even get a piece of multi-orgasmic Rodger. Maybe even introduce more of a bi-sexual dynamic between the women. Maybe even introduce one of Rodger's sisters to make it even kinkier, you know fresh off a divorce with a sexual back story between Rodger and his two sisters, them getting drunk and having sex while they were all going to the same college.

you have too many characters involved it gets confusing for the readers. delete and rewrite and dump most of the unneeded garbage remember "KISS - KEEP IT SIMPLE STUPID " then you might be a good writer.