All Comments on 'Couple Adrift Connect'

So, your main character shook himself awake, and then proposed to himself? There were a few rough patches in this story where it was hard to follow exactly what was happening - it detracted from the overall flow.

Sorry about the name blip. Very unprofessional of me. However, if you are unable to cope with adult writing that is perhaps a little patchy I should write a primer for you. Cheers. EG

A bood called Dick and Jane. Please notice the characters dont randomly switch names nor do they just around in scenes. It was a cute concept but the development was not good.