All Comments on 'Covet Thy Neighbor's Son Ch. 01'

I need a hot young neighbor like that...

WOW! Is part 2 ready yet?

Go back to school at some level and take lessons in writing. The story is so filled with "...", "word-word" (when not needed), and "word -- word" all 99.9999% not needed. Thus showing the authors must have failed their early school classes in writing.

...because this is truly ironic. I love receiving lessons in creative writing by a sub-intelligent teenager. Come back and tell me more when you've grown enough spine to identify yourself, young math genius.

this story. Real characters, VERY interesting situation, clever and well written! Oh, and hot too----But, please, chapter 2 quickly..

please hurry, bloody good writing.

JM please let BlackVelvet help with the next part also. Together I'm sure you're going to add one helluva chapter or more to this . I could even see the mother's look on her face . Very vivid writing and so much possibility ,keep it up but hurry up,ciao.

I'm looking forward to future chapters. This was more than enough to whet my appetite, while not giving it all away.

Jaymal, you know very well that if all you're being criticized is your use of ellipses and em-dashes.... Uh-oh, I'm in trouble, now. If you didn't already know you're a fantastic writer, you might take it personally. And wouldn't THAT be ironic? ;)

what we have here is two excellent writers producing an outstanding piece of erotica. When one doesn't put their name to their criticism then they must surely... be more than just a little... cowardly.

I always read everything that you write and I will continue to read this story although I did find Janice's aggressive behavior a bit of a turn-off. Either way I enjoy the sexiness of your stories.

I agree with PrincessErin: It's a good story, but Janice's agressiveness was a little too much. I'd like to see her tone it down just a little. Not as much swearing (except when they're doing it). Otherwise, I loved it and can't wait for the next chapter.

I loved it and don’t mind her aggression. I imagine a frustrated middle aged woman would behave in that way in those circumstances. My only question is “would he have resisted a he did, I wouldn’t have?” Well done, excellent detail and very erotic.

Love this story and cannot wait until you have put more chapters on here, i love the fact the older lady was so intense in what she wanted of her young man. and i can imagine the look on the face of the mother when she saw her son clad in only a towel LOL.

What can I say I love this story... The moments he tried getting away made it that much hotter. The way its described is very delicious making me lick my lips... ;-) Great read...

thank you

Wow!

I am late to the party, but i have to say, Mr.Jaymal, that this story and your writing is first class and five stars.

****Good read. Thanks for sharing.

well written, very erotic. I love the jerking off in front of an older woman fantasy.

Janice wasn't too aggressive at all. I actually loved her assertiveness over the shy boy. Such a turn-on. Great writing!