All Comments on 'Cowboys & Indians'

I want an aunt like her.

Great story. Good development, but not too long.

However, you really need to work on tense. You used a lot of present tense when you were telling a story about something that has already occurred; some other mistakes as well.

Leaving that aside, the story was decent. Don't give up, just find someone to proof read your work.

But you need an editor.