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Oral RexOral Rexover 18 years ago
Another comment on structure

Example: "one of the rather phallic salt shakers that we had commented on earlier in the meal". Had you described the shakers when you initially set the scene, then we (readers) would have realized what the object just as the protagonist did.

Again, very exciting!

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