by My Erotic Tail
some nice erotic scenes, that were part of a larger story. I liked that, however, the punctuation here was your worst yet. You desperately need some proofreading help. There are too many corrections to mention here, I'll email you.
One thing that is a common error, it correct word usage. You have a couple of they're / their problems, but one that is much less obvious, is calvary / cavalry... You used calvary, which is the hill near where Christ was crucified. Cavalry is the group of mounted soldiers (these days airborne soldiers).
Anyway, this is an excellent story, seriously marred with numerous punctuation and some grammar errors. I'll email you...
jim : )
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