All Comments on 'Crystal Ch. 04'

Maybe something like a shriek from the dragon age games. It would be able to go invisible (you could say the Dr. copied the abilities of the new girl), is extremely agile, fast, bloodthirsty, and has a crippling shriek.

If Max had been experimented on should he have power's to be revieled in the next chapter and save the day?

If it was Max who was experimented on and survived why does he not remember that? Or does he remember and not want to tell the others? Pulse if he is the one who was experimented on and survived why not have powers as the other person has questioned? There are so many more questions I could post. But I'm not going to. To tell the truth I think either one or more of the heroes or agents who are working for the heroes are working with the bad guys. There is no way that the criminals could easily escape that way and no one would find out. So bring on the next chapter to see what happens.

Thanks you, dear readers for you posts. I like seeing questions that makes me put the answer in the chapters. It let's me know that you're coming up with different scenarios in which one could match the one I have. I hope I haven't disappointed any of you readers. But even if I have, comment and let me know what you think I'm lacking in (besides the sexual scenes). Like I said, I have a couple more plots for the coming up, so be rest assured that plenty more action and sex is on the way. DM23

This chapter is awesome!! Holy crap! So if Max was experimented on as a baby, then it's possible he has powers? I wonder if it's something to do with sex? Then again, maybe not, that's a strange power for a baby to have. I can't wait to see what happens next and to find out what Max's power may be.

Great story telling. I'm sure you grammar and word usage will improve with practice.