by NoTalentHack
like all bad authors, already planning to go harem mode to try and draw this out, which is a guaranteed recipe for boredom and repetition.
Kind advice for an American authors. Please stick to writing on us related premises. You are so oblivious on everything that's happening abroad, it's embarrassing
This effort is very disjointed and awkward to say the very least. Jumps around with no direction and the sex has no erotica nor does it even make sense nor entertaining. If it is all like this for subsequent chapters it would not be worth any attention. Get some writing help or someone who knows how to write to assist you.
So... the first several named comments are supportive, and the several anonymice are critical. Typical, unfortunately.
I've done the US west coast - England flight many times. about the only unrealistic thing I see here is that the fellow is ready to do manly things for all the following night. And... anonymice... you gotta really work at being different in your comments - the first three were almost the same comment, repeated.
Clearly, since I am named I rather liked it, and would like to see the next bits, at your convenience.
Green-something
The whole BWWM thing is so overdone now on this site. Please stop with and promoting this whole idea because us black women dont want white men, we want black men.
Thanks for writing!
Sorry about those that can’t, or won’t, but figure they should complain anyway.
I've got a couple of stories I'm working on at the moment, one for the Pink Orchid 2023 event here in Romance, and then I'll write another chapter for Jay and Emma.
A pretty good story, but it appears to be crossing some lines that one of the anons has voiced. That voice appears to be from a black woman and it appears she has some kind of racial prejudice. I thought most people were over that. Being an 80 year old male and have see both sides of this color barrier, so speak. What I have seen and what is made pretty clear here by one of the anons is that some blacks are more prejudiced than whites. Sorry to say I seen that attitude more often then not. I grew up in the projects (public housing) and I was the minority and treated badly by some and ok by others. So it goes both ways. Even in my working career with all the liberalism running the show black employees could get away with shit a white man never could. A man is a man and woman is a woman and the heart knows what it wants and it is color blind. 5 stars
Really? Racism conversations? Okay, sure, whatever.
This is a website that allows you to write and post rape fantasies, infidelity stories that would wreck entire families, BDSM stories that would traumatize people and other fetishes and fantasies that would probably get you a felony conviction and registered as a sexual offender in real life... In other words, unrealistic bullshit. There's a lot of media pushing interracial relationships right now because it's an easy and relatively inoffensive way to score virtue points with the armchair activists that don't really do anything to help their causes but like to talk about boycotting My Pillow as if it means something, but in reality about 95 percent of people usually marry someone their own race, not out of bigotry or hatred but simple convenience-it's much easier to fall in love with someone you have culture and history in common with. Still, these things do happen and they seem pretty fulfilling to the people who do them, so random anons acting like a story of an interracial relationship is impossible or offensive is ridiculous and just as bigoted as the skinhead of the story. Somebody just exposed themselves as an asshole in these comments, and I hope they realize how braindead they look... Great story, by the way!
Was the title of this story Rashomon? Or blind men describing an elephant? How can some people post negative comments about this story? I thought that it was widely accepted that NTH is one of the better authors currently writing here, but apparently some folks can’t recognize quality when it’s right before their eyes. It wasn’t easy, but I waited to read this story until another chapter was posted, so I’m eager to read the second chapter. I feel sorry for green117…it must be tough going through life with that strange name. Virtually no one on this site uses their own name. Very brave of you! 😀
I thought their hopping into the sack was a bit premature and for a jet lagged man, he should have fallen asleep after the first O. Looking forward to the next part.
So hot! I enjoyed the build up and getting to know each other and sexual tension and release!
If you arrived "in the morning" in London, coming from Dallas, your biological clock would be at about 2AM, not "late in the afternoon".