by bnaylor987
It started all nice and fine. Guy eats out, meets girl, owns building, helps her in distress. All right with that, but then he enters a locked place he had hired out in order to help himself to some of the food-items there. No landlord is allowed to do that in any case. I don't wanna be the lawyer here, but if he was friend with the owner, he might have given him a call: "Do you mind if I get in for some breakfast?" Problem solved. Next point: they are in and she immediately jumps at him ... that's too fast. And that's where I stopped to read this story. I won't rate this one or even give it a bad rating. The writing was fine, but you missed out in the story department. So please take this as suggestion for your writing in the future. Take your time, let the story develop. This is no porn clip channel where everyone is going straight for the fucking. We want some story around it and even though it is all fantasy, it has to make sense somehow. So please keep that in mind.
This must be much longer with lots of sweet action.
The ending is great! This story has a large potential.
Nate and monica should use their quarantine time to enjoy each other. Age should not become an issue
bed 'em both.
bang 'em both.
breed 'em both.
repeat as required
Thanks for the comments and criticism. I am working on the next chapter, filling in some holes and hopefully setting it up for you to want more. I have not had a lot of time to devote to this- i have the story in my head and am working on getting the skeleton down in my draft stories and fleshing it out a little at a time. Keep checking back and hopefully you will like it!