All Comments on 'Daddy Surprises Me'

One star because she's just.the stepdaughter. Totally ruins it from the start.

my pussy is aching now

Ok, so no hate but honest opinion here. It was very confusing when the story would switch perspectives from First Person to Third Person. Plot was good though. I did notice though that very early in the story, a few sentences were missing a word. It took me out of the story and made me think what you intended to say. Again, no hate. For a first story, it was good! Keep up at it :)

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Take pit the IUD and bear daddy's child

I did not hate this story but I did not love it completely there were some mistakes like others had pointed out. Like how it switched perspectives with no warning or alert to it a suggestion is to use asterisks on a line below the end of one perspective and above the start of another this would possibly end that part of the confusion another suggestion is to use a document in a program like word to find errors such as missing words. Not a bad try so far and hope to see more from this set of characters

Made me so horny I’m so wet

Switching POVs is bad enough, but it takes real "talent" to do it in a sentence.

Looks at the other comments.....

Seems someone always bitching about crap these days.

Thought it was interesting from a tasty point of view. I guess someone else did or you wouldn’t have posted it.

in dire need of editing

1 star too many

Hey! Thanks for your kind words! If you notice glaring mistakes, don't hesitate to point them out! Thank you. :)