by Lily_Weidner
Need more build up to thier relationship, it's just so abrupt. The sex is hot though.
but too quick, needed more background (like where's mom?)
Good for a quick jerk-off story
I agree with the other comments, the story could benefit from more characterization about their relationship. Whys the daughter so ready to assume her daddy's wants her? Where's Mom, and danger she'll pop in the door and catch them? added suspense & tension if so. What comes next?
nothing imaginative or fresh
no real plot, about as flat line as one can get
You made me hard thinking about that tight slutty daughter getting what she needed. GREAT STORY!