by flashgordon562006
Everyone talking about spellings or grammar, shit the fuck up no one cares, no one cares if you think it's believable or will get you anywhere, it's just a nice bit off fictional writing there to get you off, dammn! It is very good though, thank you author
Thank goodness writers don't listen to the likes of your kind. Why not send me some of your works so I can critique them. All anonymous critics should not be allowed to leave their idiotic comments.
Please stop writing and get off this website. Writing like an eight year old won't get you anywhere in life. Delete your account and come back when you realise how to write well.
When a writer starts off by telling you he has 12 inches that means more like 4 inches
What a bunch of crap !!
DAMM, WISH I COULD HAVE JOIN IN THE FUN, I WOULD HAVE BEEN ON VIDEO!
Still fucking nice ! Dem twin bitches must have been whoring at school! Love it!
I've read your stuff before. This was pitiful. Like the others I gave up at the 12 inch cock part. Stop writing or stop drugs. As thick as a liter coke bottle????? BARF
1 star is too many
If your moniker is any indication, you’re 12 years old, born May 6, 2006 (or June 5, 2006, if you’re from Europe). You certainly write like a 12 year old. Get off this site.YOU’RE TOO YOUNG TO BE HERE! Cum back when you’re 18 and have learned how to write.
Try reading your story carefully before you publish. You rushed it, then you have both girls on your cock at the same time.. Yeah right.. 1 star and only that because it does not allow lower.
a load of crap! can't write an interesting story so you put in a 12" cock why not some DD tits too? no, build up at all, made women of them How? were they virgin? no cherry popping and they took a 12" cock without any problem
You are truly a crappy writer. Slow down a bit and make things a little bit more real...in all of your stories.
Obviously millimeters - twelve inches would have ruptured a young girls insides especially if it was as wide as a litre bottle of coke which of course it would have been & like a Big babies arm holding a big cooking apple ! Just imagine the hospital A&E 'what happened?" Oh daddy f....d the living daylights out of us - sorry this is beginning to sound like the crap content of the story 😁
gymnastics and big tits don't go together well; painful... just saying
I was with you until you mentioned the size of his cock. Also there were several grammatical errors. You should consider using an editor.
Literotica but unrealistic. Obviously with an approach like that centimetres if he was lucky!
Feet, inches, centimetres?
This was where I stopped reading this garbage,
All fathers and daughters should experience such uninhibited love.