by WriterDom
Not a way to end a sexy story! Heart attacks are no laughing matter!
Why just kill the father off like that? ._. It's weird if you ask me. >.>
Please tell me you aren't just going to kill the dad like that!! Is there more?!
Love the story, all the way though- but the ending was by far the best part. /Hilarious/.
It seemed like you got tired of writing it, and just said "Fuck this." in literal literary terms. So awesome.
Good buildup and story for the most part, then you killed the guy. Would have been good if it was any other story, but that was just weird. Not a good weird either.
I loved the naughty, naughtiness of this story, daddy! And then laughed out loud when he had the attack! Perfect! I usually like dirty mommy lit more, but I'm glad I read this!
well I liked the ending, even if it's just a fantasy I liked the idea of the fucker getting his !
that is the most terrible ending i have ever read... it went from pleasuring thoughts to sad? not good