by socrazy143
You started out ok. Building up the storyand all. Then when it came to the sex you "wham-bam thank you man". You should have taken more time to tell what each one was feeling. Feeling his cock push into her tight pussy. How she felt as he fucked her and etc.. Details, details, details. Explain the sex act more.
with a bit of fleshing out of the characters and work on the details of their sex acts and so on. Get an editor and keep trying.
Too contrived to be believable. He walks into his room and sees his daughter masturbating. She sucks him off. He fucks her. THEN they realise WHO they have just done it with??
And it's only in porno movies that the guy cums on her rather than inside her.
good, steps are practically correct. very possible.like the way story went
I rubbed myself so hard as I read this story. Fantasizing that daddy was licking my pussy too...mmmmm it was so good. Thanks baby. ;)