by EgmontGrigor2020
One of your BEST stories! I thoroughly enjoyed it. This could use several follow-up chapters, you know!
This just went on and on with two very odd characters.
I won't bother reading any more of this author's stories.
Although I enjoy your stories they leave me feeling like I missed something.
This reads as if a poorly developed AI with no concept of how people actually speak. I got lost I’m the rambling and pedantic prose of two quickly forgettable characters.
Slow without a hint of a purpose in as far as I could get.
He was a bastard and she a princess bitch.
If he thought her a debt collector why bother making coffee.
Speech needs to be made real.
Why is it wrong to lean over the car door?
An interesting concept, that wanders through these two meetings, his attitude is quirky and the women appear to want to either slap him down or her him.