All Comments on 'Dad's Girlfriend & Her Friend'

by EgmontGrigor2020

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AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
WOW!!!

One of your BEST stories! I thoroughly enjoyed it. This could use several follow-up chapters, you know!

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Long and rambling

This just went on and on with two very odd characters.

I won't bother reading any more of this author's stories.

dbDomdbDomover 3 years ago

Good story, would like to see where it goes......

linnearlinnearover 3 years ago
Good, But

Although I enjoy your stories they leave me feeling like I missed something.

KinPAKinPAover 3 years ago

This reads as if a poorly developed AI with no concept of how people actually speak. I got lost I’m the rambling and pedantic prose of two quickly forgettable characters.

UltimateHomeBodyUltimateHomeBodyover 3 years ago

Slow without a hint of a purpose in as far as I could get.

He was a bastard and she a princess bitch.

If he thought her a debt collector why bother making coffee.

Speech needs to be made real.

Why is it wrong to lean over the car door?

Gym52Gym52over 1 year ago

An interesting concept, that wanders through these two meetings, his attitude is quirky and the women appear to want to either slap him down or her him.

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