All Comments on 'Dahlia - Birth of an A.I. Ch. 04'

Really enjoying this series and the timely updates. Unfortunately, I can't step away once I start reading an installment.

Im sort of dumbfounded on how good this series is. There's a wonderful sense of (if you'll excuse me) hope in these stories, despite how cruel the world can be.

I really enjoy how each partner sacrifices for the other. There's a reciprocity thats stunningly refreshing in these sorts of stories. You honestly nail the dance of physical pleasure and emotional intimacy that push their love to the next level. Its honestly been a pleasure to read.

Thank you so much for sharing this gift with us. In a strange sense, this story can be a large or small as you want to make it. The selfish part of me wants you to stretch it as far as it can go (raising their giant family while taming their own planet?), but you have proven over and over again that you are the master.

Thanks again.

I'm in love with your series! I'll start at the beginning again in the new year. Five stars!

Interesting story so far. Looking forward to more.

However, I do have one bit of criticism. The scene transitions need work. A lot of work. Especially the one in chapter thirteen - there isn't a transition there when there should be. We go from the girls walking into Paul's office to meet Asha for the first time, then in the very next line we're apparently at lunch with everyone without being told that we are. Everywhere else, we at least had some idea that the scene had changed and everyone was now at a different location, but with chapter thirteen, we didn't even have that much. So yeah, work on improving the scene transitions so that they aren't so abrupt or jarring for the reader.

I don't have the math handy, but I'm pretty doubtful that an AG field capable of 20+ Gs couldn't defeat the destructive force of bullets. Furthermore, if these AIs (and Paul) are as smart and well connected as they are, why wouldn't they have seen the obvious need for security and defense? Not just to prevent assassination attempts, but the drone should have been easy to defeat.

Don't get me wrong, I'm enjoying this story, but I'm seeing a lot of smaller plot holes and I believe you're a better writer than that.

Great mix of good SF and great sex!!! 5 stars again!!!