by JoshFrom53
I like it very much. They seemed fated to be reunited.
As with a lot of stories of this nature, single friends keep you single.
Where you started to REALLY lose me :
"she wanted what was best for him. He knew that she loved him dearly and he could only conclude that she was right."
Just because a woman wants what is best does not make her right.
It just doesn't!
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Of course Bart fathered no children of his own.
And no one cared.
Sad.
cute story but I couldn't stop thinking about how very different they are so even if she now feels regret they still don't match.
Also, some bitterness is in me where I feel that if Marc Sr had not been gay and mean she would never have really wanted Bart again. So 20 years later rather than being alone she decides to try again for Bart.
Enjoyable. Near the end the 3years later, then 1.5 years later but before the 3 years was not easy to follow.
Very cool story!
Loved the twists and the psychological buildup of all main characters
Thanks
Very well written, some issues that a little longer re-read or another proof reader could have caught, but in my opinion it's a beautiful story. I usually hate flashbacks because they are not well defined and/or too long/ give useless information, the flashbacks were well written and to the point. A little more intimate scenes would have been good because of the nature of the site, but I love that you included that love making isn't always about sex. Sex stops, love doesn't.
Meddlesome "friends" and an ex wife that just reinserts herself back into his life when it's convenient for her. No thanks.
His so-called friends decided to focus on what LINDA wanted, and screw what Bart wanted. Screw that and screw them.
Five stars. Very enjoyable. You did a good job of maintaining and developing your characters and their emotions.
Good story. Well done. It surely took a great effort. What I liked, though many on this site will definitely not, is that the characters are not pure as driven snow. They show flaws, cracks, from beginning to end almost like they’re . . . human? Even in some of the comments here, there’s expression of disappointment in having human characters and they can’t get over it. It’s why I turn comments ‘off’ on my stories. Back to the story though, I liked it and kept my interest the whole way through. Bravo. Thanks for sharing. 5*. CL
Nicely written and well developed story. I enjoyed it very much as it did not follow any BTB or RAAC trope. The characters were believable and genuine.
Thank you for writing
10 Big Blazing Stars for this story. An Epic tale of love, betray, heartbreak and redemption suitable for either The HallMark Channel or The Romance Channel. Long story if you can keep all the characters straight become very interesting. The Main Characters married young but the wife was immature and easily led astray like she was destroying her marriage. Well written, thanks for the effort. Buster2U
Not very good.
It's obvious you aren't a native English speaker. Maybe consider an editor.
I’m a retired TV couch potato, but even with 8 pages, I couldn’t put it down. My only, tiny, complaint was it was sometimes difficult to know which Bart was which. However, for the story, it had to be two Barts, I figured it out.
Earle
I found the English no worse than many presumably native speakers and the story certainly earned my five stars.
Now she knew that Bart still could read her very well, she had no other choice than to be open and honest with him.
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Except for where it might relate to knowing that she intended to divorce him apparently.
Generally, liked the story. Obviously, a European-centric story so most of the name places meant nothing to me, but that's on me not on the writing.
Great story and very well written. Your command of a second language does you proud and is as good as a lot of writers on here who have English as their first. Well done. 5 stars and a favourite for me. Thank you for your hard work.