All Comments on 'Damaged Goods Ch. 01'

Interesting character, Dylan. Good use of verbal color, creating the scene. Well edited. An excellent first story.

Please don't wait too long to keep it going! You write well...

it has promise don't mess it up. It looks like you could probably squeeze in about 3-4 chapters

not bad at all,keep it up bro!!!

sloppy copy, but getting better. Has real potential.

I'm unsure of how I stand on this story. I think you have set up some great character backgrounds. Your description of locales is good. It's written well. I'm just not yet sure in what direction the story is going. Since chapter 2 posted today, I'm going to read it and hopefully get a better feel the direction you've chosen to take. So I'll let you know soon what my decision is, but either way, don't stop writing. I think as an author you are off to fantastic start.