All Comments on 'Dancing Naked in the Rain'

Thank you for the beautiful story... it was uncommonly detailed.. gentle and powerful. I came here tonight to jerk off but I found unexpected art instead...please continue..thank you!

Needs a second chapter

You're too kind, Anonymous commenter. Thank you very much.

A second chapter is a possibility. But should it be about Springer on the trail and her further adventures? Or should it be about Springer and Beer Haver's reunion?

I like the idea of a sequel with Spring Mountain Bride and Beer Haver together, building the kind of life that could have been Bryan's. Maybe Bryan can watch, and regret.

"Maybe Bryan can watch, and regret."? You have an evil streak PrevertOne. I like you.

This is the first chapter of a romance story!

Thought it was really good.

Just. Yeah.

Leave it by itself, I reckon. It's a little jewel

If I were to continue after the epilogue, Romance is certainly a strong possibility. I honestly have not thought this story out further than the end I have here.

Me too!

Thanks EB. That was always my original intent. But I've discovered my characters have a habit of living in my brain after I thought I was done with them. We'll see.

On the whole well-written, but this: ""Ughn!... Yes!... Give it to me, baby!... Fuck that pussy hard... Ah! Yeah!... Make me feel every inch... every inch of that dick... So fucking deep, baby... Mmmph!" - is porn movie dialogue, always delivered in a fake baby voice and it's a turn-off for me.

All the "Oooooooooh! Ahhhhhhh!!!! Mmmmmm..." need to go. It's not very good form.

Yeah, I know it's not for everyone. An editor suggested I get rid of it too, but I like it. It's part of my style. I like having an audible component to my sex scenes. I like to know what my characters are saying to each other and how they are saying it. Personally, I don't think there's enough talking during sex in porn, so if you can point me to some...

This was a great story.

Thanks! My third story is in progress and I have ideas for my fourth.

5 star story for sure.....

Thank you for you wonderful story. I have a passion for stories with a theme of hiking. The setting is perfect and the interaction between your characters is superb. With the last sentence of your epilogue, almost begs for another chapter. Just an idea.

Thank you again,

RecHiker

If you collect hiking themed stories, I'm going to have to spend some time on your Favorites list, RecHiker. Glad you enjoyed it.

signed

Me

You're welcome

A woman who knows the trail.

Absolutely hot.

Great tale.

Thanks zoolicious. Glad you enjoyed it.

Don't get on the trail anymore. Joints giving out now, but loved your story (wish it brought back sexy memories, but sadly nothing like this!).

BTW, and sorry to be pedantic, but your user name more properly should be 'SordidasMihiLoquere'. I saw where you found it, but it unfortunately is an ungrammatical machine translation. 'Ad' is a movement preposition, and the verb loquor (of which loquere is the present tense 2nd person singular imperative) wants the dative 'mihi' =to me. Sordidus -a -um is an adjective modifying the implied 5th decl.plural 'res'= things which is feminine, so sordidas. Sorry 'bout that (been over half a century, but I have gotten a bit back into it recently, and this was an opportunity to review.)

Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris.

nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior. ---Catullus Carmen 85

I hate and I love. Why? you might ask. I don't know, but that's what it feels like, and it hurts like hell. (my translation)

"Longest walk of shame" hahaha...

This story sounds super cathartic and erotic, I loved the support she found in others and within herself. My kind of girl. One of my favorite stories in a long long time.

I'm glad you enjoyed it Anonymous Latin Scholar, and I am absolutely tickled that somebody bothered to translate my pen name. My high school Latin is so long forgotten that I never could have worked out the translation for myself, so yeah, I took the easy way out. I'll own that. If there was a way to "edit" my pen name, I'd gladly use your version. Thanks for the lesson and thanks for reading. I hope you still get outside at least a little bit every now and then.

That was one of my favorite lines too, unexplored_worlds. I'm so glad someone else enjoyed it enough to comment on it. I guess I'm doing something right.

Hi Loqui,

With many stories I skim through the slow parts, but your story painted a picture that took over my imagination.

Although I never hiked in Virginia, I have day hiked many portions of the AT from Pennsylvania though Connecticut. I even had a very stoned, heavy make out session with my girlfriend at the time in Harriman Park in NY. We did not care if anyone saw us, so I can relate even more.

I disagree with the criticism of the pornographic language you used. In the first scene Springer wanted to hear what the couple was saying to further heighten her arousal. Also, Your couple knew they had an actively engaged audience lurking behind a try and in a sleeping bag, so the dialogue appropriately added to the scene.

I have no need to read about Springer having other lovers on the trail, especially with implying that Beer Haver is the father.

It looks like you read every word of every comment too, Jaxon16. I'm so glad my story was able to make such a connection with you. And I'm glad I could spark fond memories.

My style is my style, and I'm not likely to change it, but you make some excellent arguments in support of my use of dialogue. Thank you for that. I may steal them from you someday if I ever need to defend it myself.

The majority of commenters, both public and private, agree that any follow up should reunite Springer and Beer Haver. If I ever figure out what those two would do next, I might just write it up.

Found this story through your forum post. Great story! Great detail, great dialogue, great sex. She was seeking a certain type of passion, and she found it. I thought your dirty talk form was fine. I understand the style and for me it jived with the rest of the writing. Epilogue wasn't necessary in my opinion. I love stories about characters engaged in emotional struggles who come out stronger for it. Looking forward to more of your work! 5 stars.

Thanks, SolarRay. Especially for your analysis in the Forum. It's very encouraging as an author, knowing that I was able to set myself a goal, and meet it successfully.

"Personally, I don't think there's enough talking during sex in porn, so if you can point me to some..."

You're the writer, so if you think dialogue that comes directly from tacky porn movies is what you like and feel is appropriate, so be it. You asked for opinions and I gave mine. If you and your readers think, "Ooooh, ahhhhh! Fuck that pussy, baby!" is good dialogue, that's all that matters. For those of us looking for, as you say - a "strong, determined woman" story - well, I'll look elsewhere.

I appreciate you taking the time to offer feedback Anonymous commenter. We clearly have different tastes in erotic dialog, and that's ok. I wish you the best of luck finding authors that better suit your tastes. No hard feelings on my end.

Loqui Sordida Ad Me, I read your story and enjoyed it. What I particularly liked was that you took time to develop the woman’s personality and you presented her feelings well. Also, that she striped nude except for her hiking boots – that was a nice image and I liked your description of the woman who was having sex on the table. Finally I liked that this was a strong woman who knew what she wanted.

Moonlight and Roses,

Thanks Et lux lunae Agnus Dei, that means a lot to me. I'm glad I was able to meet your expectations after all.

Good story, hot sex and the frustration leading up to it with the trek and the arguments worked quite well. I wouldn't mind a sequel to it.

Thanks LaRascasse, I'm glad you enjoyed it. There may be a sequel someday. I know how that phone call will go. I just have to find and interesting story to follow it.

So I’m going through the feedback thread and I see this story, oh, ok I’ll give that a read, probably won’t like it but hey ho.

How wrong was I!

That was fun, great description, felt like I’d done the trip myself. As for, did you manage to make her a feminist? I’m not sure, but you certainly made her a super slutty rebound chick.

I loved it, 5stars from moi

Thanks Exescort, that means a lot. I'm a big fan of your work and I'm flattered that you think so well of mine.

More please!!!

Glad you liked it. This is my best rated story so far, but I'll keep trying to top it.

happily ever after, would love to see a sequel. A transition from falling in lust to in love.

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. I'd like to do a sequel to this one as well. I've written the phone call, but beyond that I feel like I need a really special idea for Springer and Beer Haver. I don't want to crank out a sequel just to have one. These two deserve a special story, and I haven't come up with one yet.

"Talk dirty to me!" Love it!

Wow... What an amazing and touching story.

I've tried to write why it touches me so, but I can't find the words.

So just wow will have to do. Thanks for writing.

Reminds me of many years ago when a girlfriend and I went off with a blanket on a snowmobile trail in mid-July -- guaranteed to have it to ourselves, right?

Wrong! Happily we were in recovery mode when two other hikers came down the trail and we jumped into the bushes ...

They were nice enough to turn around, but saucy enough that they left a note on my windshield: "Was it good?"

Yes, actually; yes it was good.

;-)

You capture the natural beauty of hiking, then the mundane mechanics, then her rage & confusion... & fantastic sex!

Lovely twist at the end. Could be a romance, but probably better as the short story it is IMHO.

Nice that you respond to your commenters too.

6 stars if I could.

Thanks so much for taking the time to comment. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. It's funny you should mention "Romance", because I have just published a sequel story that picks up right where "DNitR" leaves off. It's 10 pages long in the Romance category and it not quite as salacious. I don't know if you'd be into it or not, but if your curious about what happens after Springer's phone call, it's all there.

https://www.literotica.com/s/springer-mountain-bride

Thanks again for reading!

-Loqui

Came to this after reading Springer Mountain Bride. Both wonderful stories! I shall now work my way through the rest of your offerings.

xx (A wet girl from Oz)

Gosh you wrote a very convincing story. I felt like I was right there and heck I wish I was so I could get my sexy on :)

Now on to read your other stories.

Z

As someone else commented, I came to this after reading Springer Mountain Bride. Glad I read it first; it made this story better - although both stories were 5*s.

This is a terrific stand alone story and a much welcome back story for "Springer Mountain Bride." I enjoyed every word of both stories, and now I have a new writer to favorite! Thanks sordidum seminiverbius.

I am bowled over by this story and the follow on ‘Springer Mountain Bride’. I read ‘Dancing in the rain’ looking for an erotic yarn. I was not disappointed, but I was also inspired by descriptions of the Appalachian Trail which led me to research the trail in depth on the Gaia Maps website and on YouTube where I found the locations and huts described in the story. I am now planning a trip to hike part of the trail myself - after the pandemic, of course. I love stories like this which are based upon real locations, and where the characters and scenarios are believable. This story ticks all my boxes in this regard. Well done!

I'm glad I could be an inspiration, Hiker66Biker. The Appalachian Trail is truly an east coast treasure. I should plan another trip up there myself.

THIS IS A GREAT SEX STORY ABOUT ADULTS!

I SPEND A WONDERFUL DAY WITH MY GIRLFRIEND/ now wife in on that trail!