All Comments on 'Dancing to His Commands'

Story set up: fine.

Dialogue: poor and unconvincing.

Sex CV intro: unnecessary and irrelevant. (The story actually begins on paragraph 5)

Sex scenes: Okay, but crude (which is fine for readers who like it that way)

With some editing and another redraft the story would be much better.

great story love doing this with my partner she loves lots of hard cock and cum too

awesome very erotic hot horny story dancing to his commands,

so very exciting a real very wet cumming for all. and i love the build up to this story. out stand writing the story had my full attention in more ways than one , if you could only see how hard you left me

This really was an amazing story. I came on the first page. Hard.

Seriously,keep it up.

As I Beta White male, I KNOW the superiority of the Alpha Black male and submit to BBC Worship. I want my future wife and I to delight in African Phallus together, so much so that he breeds her.

I'm not used sexually in front of an audience enough, but man I love it when it happens!

Orpheum69