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rawallacerawallaceover 3 years ago
Great Start!

Ok. You grabbed me and then held on tight. I'm ready for more. Could use some editing but the flow was good and the theme speaks of some cosmic unknown.

OccurrenceOnMimasOccurrenceOnMimasover 3 years agoAuthor

Yeah, there was just a whole lot of exposition to get out of the way and some of it could have been tightened up, in hindsight.

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