All Comments on 'Dark Secret Love Ch. 01'

but it was pretty hardcore. One question...was he disguising his voice the way she seemed to be, if not why didn't she recognize him? Ok, that was two. Not trying to flame you, because I read you story and enjoyed it for the most part, but I just think it would have been alot more believable if they had been there long enough to get drunk and the lighting had been very low. My opinion, for what it's worth. If you enjoy writing, keep it up, don't give up!

but it started out so soft and gentle almost and then went right into fucking and sucking...

Thanks for your comments, I'll try and make Pt 2 a little more gentle lol. I think I made them have such rough sex because they were 'strangers'. I don't know, I wrote this when I was sleep deprived lol.

True animalistic behavior at its best. Just goes to show you that if you don't really know who you are fucking, that your intense feelings are not really hampered. I'm hoping....that they continue to fuck each other and maybe make a baby from their incestuous relationship in true lust fashion.

Not bad.. better than the last two stories I read from other writers. LOL. But did he disguise his voice as well?

shit why didn't yo finish the story if you can't finish then don't bother starting show some respect for your readers

To all those who read and reviewed DSL, and were expecting the second part, I apologise for the long wait. Due to several circumstances in my life, DSL was pushed to the back of my mind where it was forgotten about completely. But I am now in the process of writing Part 2.

It'll be posted soon.

man this story is hot it's alot better then those disgasting lesbian stories incest rules and stupid lesbian stories sucks

I loved this story, man it was a kickass 100% hot horny sexy story, perfectly written to near perfection

i say near perfection, it isnt perfect though for just one reason.

If both brother and sister are fully naked. bar a head/face mask did that mean despite the fake names they was taking in fake accents???

If not here's the downfall to your story

1)they'd instantly reconize each other from their voices

2)if she's seen her brother naked and ogled his "9 inch" before surely she'd of remembered it and thought, hang on a second isnt that my brothers cock

3)Physical appearance, even with a mask, and just a face mask both have secretly lusted after each other which means both are an expert on each others bodies, or what they've seen. if they are just wearing masks and masks only surely she'd of noticed his hairstyle the way his hair way, the way her hair was and her appearance beyond the mask

Bar that it was an amazing story but from the moment i met all this was doing my head in, the whole wouldnt they reconize each others physical appearance, the mannerisms in how they talked, the way they spoke as in accent it's self..it shouldnt of been so muchn of a suprise when they took the masks off

it would of been more of a suprise if one or both of them said after it.,...ahhhhhh so i was fucking my sister/brother...i thought so...wanna chill out at home later and watch brokeback mountain...nooo ok bend over hahaha

This didnt ruin the story but it made it un-perfect. i've been to a real life "eyes wide shut" nude-sex party where u wear a mask and i reconized several people who were in a red robe with a mask from just saying hello to them.

hell in your story the host knows its his friend straight away without saying anything despite having a mask on

both brother and sister here would need to be deaf dumb and stupid as fuck to not realise they was making out with each other

brilliant story though :) sorry for the mental rant but i couldnt let it go after such a fantastic story :)

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if you think it is ok to do rough sex because they thought they were with strangers you are a class A asshole. by this reasoning it is ok to rape a stranger but not a relative because strangers don't matter. if they are going to have rough sex it is not because they thought they were strangers they would no matter what people do not treat others different than family. generally the way you treat family is the way you treat everyone. your best bet is to delete all stories and forget about writing because you can't do it to save your life.

Obviously we'll never see part 2