by EmilyDreams4U
re:
Rogue
Rouge is a cosmetic.
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Or the French word for red.
LOL! I got those same comments when I first started writing. ☺️☺️. Keep up the
Good work. I love your story and can't wait yo read more.
The build up is great, I cannot wait for Anton and Carla to meet.
Most hospital now a days don't just let you go into the maternity ward with out checking in first or having some come get you cause of Crazy people.
I know rouges/rogues has already been commented on, but the ASL glitches in these first three chapters is, I believe, going to prevent me from reading more.
And, by the way, "to" and "too" are not interchangeable!
It's a good story line so far and yes I see the holes nurse ya know but it's good I'm just glad to see it nwa and hopefully you will finish I'm tired of reading multiple chapters and realizing I won't read the end since the writer stops
Story line developing nicely
Chapters need to be longer and more detailed
Eg you could have developed the Grayson pack mystery further
Get an editor please because you have problems with:
Spelling
The name of the main character. Is it Carla or Clara?
Past/present/future tense
Rouge is make-up for your cheeks. Rogue is the word you should be using
Wow great story, too bad you're choosing to abandon it. I would have loved to see where it was going.
Please continue the story! I love the storyline and can't wait to see what happens next!