All Comments on 'Dating for a Night Ch. 01'

please more

I agree with anon, more please!!

He got it up her and filled her up now she in the pudding club

"Travis- make love to me. Give me pleasure, after all- I am your girlfriend for tonight!" she screamed.

She screamed that? Seriously? Seems way to long (and formal/stilted) for something someone would scream.

Can't wait to read the second part of the story.

This story is awesome, can"t wait for the next story

I usually like dating stories but as far as a dating story goes this is pretty boring of a story. They hold hands kiss and then fuck. Thats it?

no character development no background, who are they and why should we care about them or want to see them together. what little you did write was way too rushed and unbelievable this should be three times longer to get to the same place. delete and do a proper rewrite using a good editor.

I'm guessing this wasn't orginaly writen in English. Try something better than google translate next time

please add more to the story. I hate cliff hangers

Thanks for writing such a great story. Me and my sister loved it since she'll be having my baby soon. We too did the boy/girlfriend thing too, but we carried it on even now. Our parents know about us and support us too. She's expceting a girl in 2 months from now... now being 8/31/13... PLEASE keep writing more of these and we'll keep reading them.