by splitlapper
A lame old storyline, badly written and full of errors. You need advice and an editor.
A nice read and very hot. I would have liked more of the seduction at that Halloween party.
Don’t listen to the anonymous Lame. Not everyone thinks as critical as he/she does
have to agree with a lot of other coments, needed more seduction at the party, the editing needs work but it was a good story, would have been fun for the daughter to start fucking her dad in the shelter with the other couple there, there would be no way he could stop her so he would have to accept the situation. and the ending was just strange.
more seduction at the party, i would have had them fucking when the other couple came in and had her calling out Oh daddy, yes daddy fuck me