All Comments on 'Dead-ends'

[20.07.22]

Such a BRILL story!

Just the right length and amount of tension.

Max reminds me of Bill in Marsh Alien's Goin' Fishin'.

11/10!!!!!

dam good story

I don't know why all the male protagonists in your stories always annoy me? And frankly this one just reminded me too much of that one of your where the whole family is fucking each other including his girlfriend. And after he finds out he runs away because he's so distraught and then just ends up fucking then anyway?!

Good, very good. Now I have to go read your back catalogue!

Great read. Quite a few funny moments. It was a good length but it's just another one of your stories that leaves you wanting more.

I loved you sneaking in the Mortanhouse surname! 5 stars!

And with stories such as this, he is still my favorite author on this webpage. Grouch6977

Wow! I loved it the way you broke the news of Max’s wealth throughout the story. This has ben the best story in quite a while. Thanks you so much for the time you took in writing it. SK742

5 stars. If I had a complaint it would be that it felt like it petered out at the end, plenty of build up but then just ended with no fanfare. Overall though pretty good, like that the MC didn't forgive any of his family except his mom who tried to show she cared.

Very nice, very well done. Thank you!

GREAT READ

Always great

Absolutely fantastic! 5 Stars!

Thank you.

This was a lot of fun to read and nice to see a bit of redemption from Max's mother.

A bit overboard with fantasy

5 stars as always for your work

So many leads left opened, needs a follow on story. Well written!

Once the existence of the trust fund was revealed the tale became nothing but a succession unlikely coincidences - "overegging the pudding" in one apt term for it

There was no real plot after the trust fund was shown as Max's hole card - no tension, entirely predictable -average or worse The girlfriend become sister in law was the one original feature of the story

Great story ... enjoyed it even thou had to go to the dentist a few times ! Have a "5" on me.

Wish it had been in multiple parts!

5

Nice! ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Most excellent story.

So is Dr Zeuss and Charles Dickens etc

speaking as a less than rich IT guy, I loved it.

Awesome story!!! Thank you!

5* loved it.

My only quibble, believe it or not, is that it wasn't longer.

He is a little over the top for my liking. He has no faults. Whenever he puts on glasses he becomes Superman instead of Clark Kent.

Also, he wants to keep secrets from his family, but he does not care that Stephine or others say them out loud.

On the whole, it's enjoyable so keep posting.

One of the few authors on this site that when I see a 13 page story I know I’ll wish it was 14. Great job! 5*

The initial spin was good, but then it seemed to degenerate into how excessive it could get. Still a fun read, and although it was quite long, the ending could have been drawn out somewhat and enhanced. It seemed to get a bit rushed the last couple of pages.

Another wonderful story from fantastic writer. Man u mastered this game. Great story I really loved it 5** aren't enough

I have to say that even at 13 pages, it seemed a bit rushed. Eg, scenes we're set like a club after dinner and then suddenly we're months forwards and on a completely different thread.

The scenario and the characters are sufficiently complex and interesting that they deserve to be more fully fleshed.

5* but I think you go for 6.

Iloved the story especially that was all i on piece so one doesn't sit with a stora that lacks the last chapter. Good luck for the future!

I generally avoid the realty long stories, but this one is captivating. some really funny lines intertwined in a great tale. A sequel would be appreciated. Thank you.

Guy took an awful lot of abuse at his job, for someone who was rich, but all in all, I liked it.

Agree with other comments about length, could so have been a bit longer or maybe

a second chapter. Really enjoyed it, awesome. 5 stars.

continue good work.

Very good!

Good story. May be just me but, compared to your other stories, it seemed a little flat and too Pollyanna. Still a good story. 5✨

A fun romance to read, very much a Soul71 story, told in his particular style.

I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Scores 5/5

Felt good all the way through the read. Very enjoyable .

Very good, enjoyable story. I liked how Max wanted to build a life that didn’t depend on his family name and money. He finally reached the point where he doesn’t have to deliberately antagonize his father and sister, his achievements and recognition enough — and much more elegant than harsh words.

Pretty freaking amazing!!!! Hope you write more in this category.

Great story with excellent plot and character development. I really liked how Max started out coming across as a asshole, but then you unwrapped his back story and I found myself liking him.

The story really needs an editor to help with all the sentence fragments. At times it felt like I was reading a list in point form.

Love the story. I have read this story several time and have enjoyed it very much. Keep up the great writing and thanks

Last thing first; sorry it didn't work out for Sephine - I'm a suckered for HEA.

A few little quirks, eg. why was Tera so bad to him until the end when she seemed to control the family finances anyway? But overall I loved it, the anger he had for his family and the love he had for Terry were clearly displayed.

5⛤

Will the story continue? Will his father and sister cause any drama? This story should continue, just to fill in some unanswered questions.

Yeah, I with SAV12. Don't get me wrong, this story was really awesome. But yet there more to be desire from this story. I don't know how else to explain it, I just didn't get that fulfillment like you do when you read a great story like this one. Like it's not don't done or something. All I'm saying I really hope this story continues a little bit.

Very good. 4*. Would have 4.5 if it were available. - 0.5 for leaving the ex-girlfriend issue half-formed and hanging in mid-air. Why does she appear so unsettled about Max?

He'll never touch his trust fund... except for the multiple times he does. And I have a prediction for chapter 2, Max ends up in a 3 way relationship with Terry and Stephanie.

Overall a decent story,especially the somewhat reconciling of Max and his Mother,tho it didn't specifically state they did or not,but from different angles it was implied they did make up. Now as for Max's Father and Sister it was stated plain as day they were ostracized for good,and I am glad of that.

Now as for Terry and more importantly Orin ended up getting his ass beat twice by Max and a gutt punch by Greg,that was pure justice.For Stephine it was sad she trusted Carl who tried to swindle the trust fund from her,but thankfully he couldn't get into her account,but wish he had gotten the same treatment as Orin did.But given the circumstances I am glad Stephine ended up okay and her and Max and Terry forming a close sibling-in-law bond.

Lastly I hope all of them formed a big happy family with the baby on the way.

You have written another Excellent story. It was actually a fun read. 5stars

Fantastic job grrat story. How bout a part 2 the continuing lives ? Thanks for ur hard work kno it was enjoyed and appreciated.

Great as always. Wish you had fleshed out the ex girlfriend and why she was a bit fixated on him later on. Sister in law seems primed for something.... Great descriptions of emotion, really sets you above other authors. Thanks for this story. Hope there is more to come.

Would be nice to get a part 2 to see what happens with his family…and Stephine!!

WOW just WOW yep this needs a part 2 or a part 3 but I am not going to push it.

What a fantastic love story between Max and Terry. I was hoping that the storyline would at least go through their marriage and raising of their children. So Soul71, any chance of getting a sequel to continue this wonderful tale? Well done...5/5

You my friend are very talented. I've read most of your works all great but this and the long ride are my favorites read each twice. I must say though you've left it open for a sequel and a spinoff or two. Would love a coming of age story of stephanie from the spoiled princess to the new person she grew into. Or even a prequel of how Greg and darla met. But kudos on a great story ********** 10/10.

That was one hell of a great story. Almost didn't read past page 1 (I don't like bitchy/spoiled sister stories. Glad that wasn't the focus of the story).

I also agree with what AP66 and rancher46 had to say.

All in all 5 double stars.

Fantastic story great development and progression

What a great story. You write very well.

One of your best stories yet!

This is one of the best stories I have ever read. It is terrific. AAAAAAA+++++++

This was absolutely amazing!!

Loved the intrigue regarding hidden pasts and identities. Hated to see this saga come to an end. Great job, Author!

Great read! Thank you.

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Great story. It seemed like there were a number of loose ends though and the ending also seemed abrupt. It would have been good to have an epilog or even a sequel.

I have read this story twice now and I am just as impressed with the story as the first time I read it, I Would like to see a second chapter of this saga if you have a mind too. Thanks for writing wonderful stories.

I'd give it ten stars if I could!!

I so enjoyed this story, twice. I sure wish there was a second chapter or follow up piece. Thanks for sharing. 5 stars from me.

Great story!! 5 🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟

I though the media fuckers were intrusive with their questions!!

Enjoyed most of it enough to give it a 5-. However, it was spoiled by Stephanie's breakup with Carl. It's not clear what the purpose of that factoid was, other than perhaps to underscore that Max wasn't perfect.

Totally agree with most recent anonymous. The “Carl” thing was unnecessary and detracted from the ending. Otherwise I liked it.

Soul71,

I'm glad I came across this story as I thoroughly enjoyed it. I enjoyed the character development of the Cheeky son of gun Max and the gorgeous Twins!

I will be checking out the rest of your catalog. 5* all the way.

Just one question, why are there many red-headed heroines in all the literotica stories? Long almost dark blue Black hair is Awesome, a lovely Platinum blonde is Hot too, Strawberry blonde have those beautiful soft smooth light ginger carpet to go with drapes!

but So many freaking Redheads. Oh I rarely read of a red-headed villaneous!

Cheers mate,

Luke (Old_Lion)

Outstanding! 5 Stars!

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I have read this story more than a dozen times and never get tired of reading it.

Please continue writing stories like these as they are good reading and very enjoyable.

Well written.

Great plot.

His family was weird but mega moolah and people mixed makes a recipe for fruit cakes.

I enjoyed the down to earth rich man.

Great story I wish you'd write more in the romance category I have read "The Long Ride" and this one just as good.

I do wish you could do an epilogue with the wedding and the birth of the child.

Just how much his sister and father were run over by the Karma bus.

Orin must be the next stop for the Karma bus.

Max succeeded in spite if it's father and sister.

The mother is still a paradox she might be the one who has the money.

Carl was a disappointment.

I liked it over all, 5 stars

Great 5* story not like some of the other crap you've written!!

Story needs a part 2 with NO Recon with his father, slut sister and her wife

5* but needs a follow up. Darcy and MJ need their comeuppance. The mother's terms for the loan was good

One of two of your best stories, the other being long ride.

Excellent story. Thanks.

Your best work.

Your best work! 5 gold stars for certain.

Loved it.

A great story, it was well written, had great character development and was truly entertaining. Too bad 5 stars was the highest I could give. Keep up the good work. MtM

This is a wonderful story!

I have read this story over a dozen times and I never get tired of it.

Keep up the good work!

Both your romance stories were excellent

I enjoyed this story very much. Five stars. There were a few odd punctuation errors that through me. At one point Terry says “I will love you dad.” When the context suggests you meant “I will. Love you dad.” Odd moments like that. The transitions from one scene to another were occasionally hard to follow. And to be honest, Max’s over the top angry comments made him hard to like in the beginning. But I enjoyed the premise and story twists. Fun read.

A lovely story, and really well written 5 Stars ( wish I could give more)

An easy 5/5. Well crafted.