All Comments on 'Dead Girl Ch. 01-02'

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Wargamer over 2 years ago

Nice build so far. See how this proceeds.

RedMockers over 2 years ago

I liked that she called him Humbert at first. Made me wonder if he knew what she referenced.

Anonymousover 2 years ago

Part 3?

Anonymousover 2 years ago

Nice build to a continuing story.

Anonymousover 2 years ago

Guy is kind of a doormat. Already rooting against him. 'Humbert' may have been an accurate name to call him. Striking thought process after meeting her as Humbert Humbert

Anonymousover 2 years ago

Excellent character development. I like the lonely desperation you have put into Don. It makes him multidimensional. With this level of development he could go anywhere.

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