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by shykylie

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MiniwandMiniwandabout 3 years ago

A little short but interesting.

However, choose between past time and present time in your writing. You started with the former and finished with the latter. You can't do that

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

I liked it, with that said why not develop the story from bullying to the different degrees of domination and humiliation with these 3 characters.

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Most of my stories will be based around celeb/ tv/ movie couples. Any constructive criticism is wanted. I am by no means a professional writer. I do this as a hobby