All Comments on 'Debi and the Boys'

I like the build up, please don't keep us waiting too long for the next part.

Nice start can't wait for the continue story.

Spelling. Grammar. Check them. Or learn them.

need to keep this going ! Thanks,

I liked the concept and the story. However, you are in serious need of an editor to correct your spelling and sentence structure. Multiple mistakes in both areas takes away from the story.

Story concept is wonderful. My 5 Star grading was as inducement to continue but comes with caveats.

Opening few paragraphs relied much to heavily on divulging information in an unappealing manner. That straight 1, 2, 3, ... he was she was opening will turn people off. I can think of three better openings but then I am a Monday morning QB and you are the creator.

Have at least three planned scenes where you depict loving concern of husband for his wife. Do Not simply tell the reader, as this is a story and everyone filters thru their own experience of how they would treat a spouse they love.

Consider how a scene or intra-action will end and work back thru how you want the people to interact.

Frankly, having you tell us Jamal was the youngest friend was a silly revelation and I think if you re-read it you'll agree. Could have been divulged later in a less in my face manner.

You really need to finish this story 😀

Who the hell is Josh? Her husband John told her to accidentally send the email to "Josh" but we weren't told who Josh was.

Finish it please.

Waiting for the next installment. Premise is good can't wait for more!

wow....

this story is sooooohottt I want more please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I thought there was going to be a Page 2 to this story. Please keep going.

This is all there is to the story or that this is first chapter you thought so little of your own story to include the chapter number in the title to warn it wasn't a complete story.

This is a very erotic story. Got me hard quickly for sure. Yes it needs editing and some decent grammar, but we don't read these stories for correcting the writers style,

So frustrated when it came to an end,

I for one, hope it's just the beginning of a very erotic series.

Please add another page or more.

A few more chapters please.....

made me hot horny and hard, wanking off as I read it again

Please don't keep us hanging keep up the good work.

Read it twice and second time was just as nice!

The only part that was missing she should had wore a pair of Cum fuck me high heels ! ! !

Great start. I was looking to read where she was gang banged but you stopped the story. Hope theres a part 2 cuming

Very Hottt!!!!

needs to be continued ! Thanks

I am very close to the next part. Sorry it has taken me a while.

I fucking love this story and have been so excited for the next chapter! Can't wait to read it

Really enjoyed the story, but you are taking way too long to get the next part submitted!!!

This story is by the far the best I had come across when I started looking up erotica about a year or so ago. I waited patiently for a sequel coming back almost weekly, but never got what I wanted. I found the story linked below and my god it fills the hole this left. Enjoy!

https://www.literotica.com/s/a-summer-to-remember-13

What a hot start,,, Please keep going!

At first, the premise was a little shaky for me... but you described Debi as a Trophy Wife, so maybe her son does believe she is stupid enough to believe a response from her son is actually from her husband!

I gave it two stars, because of grammar, punctuation, and the fact that it’s an incomplete story...

Loved the story i hope there is more cumming.

She has to fuck them all. Jamal is the last to empty himself in her wet pussy and he impregnates her. John gets the surprise when she delivers a black baby!

The fantasy of every teenage boy. But it is over a year since you wrote it. She could have had a baby by now and be back on the prowl.

Hope you have a sequel in mind

Great start to possibly an outstanding follow-on. Comment: the sequencing is a bit abrupt without too much development. However, do keep 'em cumming . . .

Hot story. Can't believe there is no sequel. Perhaps next time this happens Kyle comes upstairs to watch and join. Then a day or two later, she gets it from all of them or maybe mom continues with Kyle and Kyle role plays his friends with her until it happens for real. Could be a great series.