All Comments on 'Delta Dawn'

Quite southern gothic and well written. As far as Dawn goes I would bet on the lover she was waiting for,what would she need a suitcase for if she was waiting for hubby? Plus she knows Bobby is dead,she doesn't know Jimmy is.

Would have been more satisfying if Bobby had shot Jimbo before turning the gun on himself. Witnessing both deaths would have made Dawn's condition more believable.

I like your distinctive storytelling style. It reminds me of the oral histories I grew up listening to from my old world grandparents and their contemporaries. These long run-on remembrances were essentially my family genealogy. No other records existed.

Even though their stories focused on births, deaths, and marriages, they were also embellished with, and punctuated by anecdotes and ‘war stories’. Who wronged who, who murdered who, historical events, etc.

As I read “Delta Dawn” and then “Going for a Walk”, I had a nostalgic sense that I was listening to the same type of oral storytelling. Thank you for sharing. Very enjoyable.

Now that was a great short story there. I can see and feel the small towns in the Mississippi Delta where I spent some time during my military service. You got the people right too, without using hokey southern, redneck dialect. I enjoyed the references to that great Tanya Tucker song "Delta Dawn", right down to the faded rose that she had on. Great stuff!

Like the flow and style. I was a bit surprised dawn fell for the guy and surprised the judge lets her wait for her lover that will never come. Her sitting there is a daily reminder his child is a cheating wife.

. . . are not always the same thing.

I liked the line about the kudzu being the only thing holding the barn up. There is more than one barn in the South in such condition.

Well done, sir.

I guess being the witness to the murder you caused isn't a good recipe for ongoing mental health.

what does death look like? And can she still see it from the park bench?

So jes xactly how do dem ducks make her feel better? What with all the quackin' and fighting over bread and such?

S'pose that the judge jes kep her out dere like a billboard, now a finely published message, not to think too hard about why y'all needed ta keep to that Sunday school learnin, and why the most impo' nt rule in THIS house is ta kep ya hands ta yerself!

Honestly, this wasn't bad, and I gave you 4 stars. Thank you very much for the contribution!

A slice of southern life with simple references to honor, family, & southern justice. I agree you managed it without being hokey and dialects. All it was missing was pecan pie to go with the coffee, but I doubt that's a breakfast treat.

Never thought I'd actually learn something from L.W. I thought Helen Reddy was the original artist but I found I was incorrect.

Well told story.

pls write more.

I would say Dawn was waiting for her husband. The dress she was wearing was the one she bought for her honeymoon. She was packed for with a shoulder bag and a small suitcase which could be assumed to be enough for a honeymoon. So my thoughts are she is in shock, totally blanking out about Bobby's suicide and is stuck in a loop waiting for her betrothed to start their married life together.

For something completely different, anyone else thought about SaddleTramp's cheating zone when Dawn's mother disappeared at the beginning of the story?

Don't keep us waiting long for your next story.

When a shark enters a fish pool and the fish ignore the teeth all loose. One his eternity one his life and another her sanity. Once this small town found out about his past, he should have been handed over to the ones he had already swindled.

It’s 2019.

When people don’t know the difference between “lose” and “loose,” all lose.

Looking forward to your next story. *****

Your story brought back memories. I spent three months in Mississippi once, while working a case. Your story made me feel the heat and humidity of the Delta. The characters ring true also.

Been a while since I herd that song

Delta Dawn was Tanya Tucker's big hit. I've never heard Dolly do it. I love his story.

Interesting--but a little hard for me to follow. You could really make it a winner with a little more work.

Wonderful flow and style. I immediately bought into the story and wanted to know what happened. Keep up the good work. TC ireland

It's just amazing how folks in that part of the country have a knack for solving problems of an unsavory nature. LP

Wish they got ahold of Jimbo before he sullied Dawn.

Well done! Great story. Love that Southern justice.

Sad. All of you that bitch all the time. Why do you read this?

Good story, a different twist on the genre.