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by eroticyates

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Names ?

You seem to interchange the names throughout the story

meisteremeistereover 11 years ago
Good Christmas Eve exercise

A little ragged around the edges and a few stylistic misadventures, but full of promise. You hint at the ambiguities, ambivalences and contradictions that are the soul of mature Eros. More. Please.

diagonesdiagonesover 11 years ago
Excellent

erotic writing. Female fantasy nicely fleshed out. But who the hell is "Tom?"

eroticyateseroticyatesover 11 years agoAuthor

I have reread that dam thing twenty times! I can't find the name problem! Dam it! I'll have to re read it. Thanks. That's funny. Who the hell is Tom?

eroticyateseroticyatesover 11 years agoAuthor

Found it! Tee hee.

eroticyateseroticyatesover 11 years agoAuthor

Re edit version coming soon.

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