All Comments on 'Desire Stirring'

A beautiful story. I liked the characters and the pace of the story. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Your story would be much better if written in past tense, rather than present. Present tense seldom, if ever, works well.

I like this one. I hope they make.

Thanks for reading and commenting. Present tense doesn't work for everybody. For me, it gives the story more immediacy than past tense. Past tense is more often used and therefore might be more comfortable for some readers and writers as well. I use both depending on my mood and what I think works best for a particular story. That also goes for point of view, and first person vs. third person. As a writer yourself, I'm sure you get it.

I usually complain that something is stretched out over too many pages, but in this case I wish you had taken a little more time. Perhaps there's a Chapter 2 in the offing. I only have one little nit to pick. Although I like Cabernet with almost everything I really think their dinner of crab and salmon would have done better with a white, perhaps a pinot grigio or sauvignon blanc or even a brut champagne if they felt festive. Their relationship is moving a little fast, but I like the people and that counts for a lot to the reader. 4*

Your sweet stories are such a Happy Discovery for me!

I hope you continue their love story.

Another excellent writing, insofar as it goes. Leaves an open opportunity for a stories about trials of dealing with pandemic panic; about the trip to Bermuda; about a pregnancy scare?

A couple editorial notes: Dessert still has a double s, never caught by a spell checker because both variations are legitimate words. And stripping is what we do when removing paint or clothes, while striping is creating lines. Again, neither are homonyms, but both versions are legitimate words and never caught by spell checkers.

Great story development as it goes - and then again - nothin!

What is it with that? There is sooo much opportunity for their love to continue to grow for them and their families!!!!

Many times we feel that we are reading cliff-hanger episodes that just suddenly leave us hanging - until - never????

Again, I appreciate the comments. But some readers seem to miss the point of a short story. Short stories don't need a neat resolution or a follow-up. They are slices of life in the life of the characters. Most are merely moments in time, situations. Novels, on the other hand, beg the sort of resolution that some of my readers have criticized me for not providing.