by Bloodwoman
the start was ok. it was just enough to make me wait around for more. bring it.
Thank you for sharing, please continue?
I find new stories with writers that can grab my interest right off will usually continue to write exceptionally well.
You started a story that even though it is only one short chapter so far it can grab an audience's attention and keep them wanting to read more. I have one suggestion that you try to make the chapters longer as you develop the story. Otherwise some reader's might start to complain about it. I hate to see nasty comments that people leave whining and crying about stuff. But other than that I give this 4 stars so far and that's saying something about a story that's just beginning.
Thank you for all your feed back, Chapter 2 will be posted tomarrow the 17th and the next should be up three days after that and so on until chapter 8 is finally posted. Still working on chapter nine and hpe to have it done soon.
Happy reading