All Comments on 'Detention Center FNG'

Nice story. It's a promising start.

I Think i like to know what happens next to Alex and Jillian.

Gave it 4 stars. Sometimes it gets a bit messy in the 'who does what'.

And at one point you mixed up the names I think.

But it's an intriguing story. Thank you!

D.

I'm guessing the whole story was leading up to the punchline. I worked in a correctional facility so I'm familiar with a lot of the locations and situations you described. In my experience control would be unlikely to have a 45 minute window of uninterrupted time but I guess it's possible. It would be so risky though, as unexpected events can change the timing of everything. Control also had to watch cameras for unapproved movement and staff safety. I can't see a veteran officer risking the safety of her peers for a little thrill sex. It would have been more believable if they had been relieved for a break and found an unoccupied space to do the deed. I actually had a hard time thinking about the sex as I thought about the two being delinquent in the duties. Erotica should be hot, but it should also be smart. jMHO. Cheers

Good story, I was worried this would be the dominant inmate takes on the guard or some such thing, but the variation on the supervisor employee worked well. One thing was distracting. Srg. is not pronounceable it is an abbreviation normally rendered as "Sarge."

As a former correction officer it was a fun fantasy. It doesn't seem feasible time wise, but fun none the less. look forward to more

Thank you all for the great feedback. I apologize for the allocated time typo. The 15 minute time frame and Sarge pronunciation have been corrected and submitted. They should be updated soon.

I'm glad you all enjoyed it!