All Comments on 'Diary of John: Dana'

Love the details of the sex so amazing

Nicely constructed. I liked your character descriptions. Nice lead in to the sex. I had to suspend reality a bit, but...it is a story, after all. Worth 5 stars!

You went back and forth between the two names often, so unless his name is James John or John James, then I think you messed up. FYI for any future writings: get the main character's name straight. :) Otherwise, decent story. Though if he was drenched in her juices from squirting, why didn't he just a year least rinse off in the shower as well? Seems something others would smell on him...

Thank you, these were my first stories. I'm not the best at English for it is my second language, I will do better next time. I thought I changed his name completely. Thank you though for liking and leaving your comment. It will help me edit my next one. Would anyone like to help edit it?

I hand a hard, if you'll pardon the expression, time with the seduction, but believe the sex was incredibly hot.

That story was exquisite. Easy 5 stars.