All Comments on 'Different Worlds Ch. 03'

I love the pace of your story telling, making one wonder if they'll ever make it. You have really built the characters well, and they are developing nicely. Looking forward to the next few parts.

The writing is good, but I have to comment about the device used to draw out the development of the relationship. You used Richard and Sara as just friends, but of course Ivy has to see them and misinterpret what she sees. This sort of relational mistake is seen so often in stories that it almost becomes annoying. Does it actually happen in real life, yes, of course it does, but I suspect more often in fiction than in reality.

Like rocky road chocolate this is tantalizing. How about a hot kiss for Ivy and put her on the road to eternal happiness?

How can this chapter end here, woman?? Sweet lord!

You know I've been checking back every couple days looking for updates. Love it!

Can't wait for the next chapter...I love how you've set the foundation for the story!

I am hooked and I just love this story. You are very good.

Good writing, it certainly draws the reader in. Looking forward to the next installment.

A great well-written and unhurried story. Better and better.

Brilliant!

Though I do have a major complaint: I'm getting too distracted from my own writing by wanting to continue reading your story ...

I appreciate the complexity and subtlety of how you handle the human interactions.

high praise from a fellow writer @AnAncient! thanks xx