All Comments on 'Dina Might with a Laser Beam'

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Good story , I gave it 4 because you switched gears in the middle. The spanking could have been a whole other story on its own. Should’ve stuck with the laser theme in this one. But still a good one

Well done!

Must admit the laser piece is very erotic nd I thought Dina and Jack wee going to make it as the couple. Then you introduced Laura and the dynamic became ompletly different, not better or worse, just a chemge that threw me as the reader. And, finally came Joanna which changed it again but left the conclusion a little lacking. Possibly you intend to write another chapter as the relationships nd evn Sam remain unresolved. Perhaps that's how you intended it to be.

Well done. No 4 from me, it's a 5 ⛤

Not perfect, but I loved it ! Cant wait to read more. Well done !

I loved the transition from this very practical, down to earth business story about trading in second hand goods - to this hot, fantastical sexy romance. You took me along with you from the very concrete to the fantasy and loved how hot it got!

I loved this story. The change up is what drew me in more as I thought it was going one direction and you brought in a twist I didn’t expect. The fantasy tie-in and subsequent fulfillment was great!

I tried, but I only made it to the bottom of the first page before getting boredd. Its kinda boring

Maybe it's kinda interestingg, maybe not. Couple of pages too long - I quite like the way theyy speak to each other though. Maybe a few pages shortter is best