All Comments on 'Dinner and...'

Nice and simple.

It wasn't too conventional. The point about it being her birthday seemed almost incidental, there were never a big reveal concerning the friend and his wife and the intervals of absence. I imagine you must be planning on creating something like an interliterary universe, where characters meet and interact. It's a fun idea. I understand you wished to keep your characters nameless but sometimes the "hes", "shes" and "his best friends" became slightly disorienting.

Still I enjoyed many of the descriptions. You have a talent of making actions sound erotic and not just come of as "he did this, he did that, then this..." Well done!