All Comments on 'Discoveries'

Great description... wonderfully sensual.

Despite some uneven writing in the story, it's still so lovely and lyrical and poetic. Thank you! Look at the beginning of the story--it's all cold statement and not as warm and flowing as the detailed scene. Your language really comes alive when you go into scene.

I think what I'm trying to say is this is a beautiful story as is and you are a damned fine writer and please don't do narrative summary anymore because it's too cold.

Very hot. I could barely keep my hands to myself while reading this. I hope that a part 2 is in the works..

excellent don't stop now

Needed another chapter - The next day.......!