by X_Christina_X
You're grammer was horrible. I couldn't even finish because it was so bad. Maybe you should go back to 6th grade and learn how to to spell "took". I didn't like this at all.
If the odd misspelt word or a bit of in correct grammar is all it takes to put someone off a hot sexy story , then its just too bad. Most of these authors are amateurs and all are posting for free , for which I am grateful .
I for one found this erotic and would of liked more.
Yes pee play isn't for every one , but I enjoyed it and the mistakes weren't that off putting.
If you are going to be so hard on an author have the nerve not to do it anonymously .