by Vaguewriter
I thoroughly enjoyed your story. You sound like a man similar to me. I like a good description and gradual development rather than a 'slam bam' or quick 'suck and fuck'. As you say in the story, the images created in the mind are a lot more erotic than porn on a screen.
I look forward to more stories from you. Leah's visit begs more fun, and don't leave out the gradual development with good descriptions.
Thanks for a good read!
Your story was gentle. I was particularly attracted to your male character who was very considerate of the female. He intuited her need for a slow development of the relationship. Then, you allowed her to grow into the relationship and release herself to the changes. A good romance story. There is potential for more stories with these two characters, i.e. the girlfriend showing up for a visit, the visit to the nudist camp, maybe also some exhibitionism in town. Thanks for an enjoyable tale.
Really enjoyed your debut story. The characters read as real people, even though the situations are beyond my reality. Bonus points for Dave “laving her clit,” as opposed to lathing, which I’ve seen at least twice in stories on Literotica. ;)
great first story. well-developed and likeable characters. also a clever storyline. I hope you write a chapter 2.
I don't think the author has spent time at a remote cabin in the north woods. He's on the power grid - can't be all that remote.
A twenty year marriage and the gay ex-husband gets the city property, and she gets a mess out in the boonies. Doesn't make sense, except that the author couldn't be bothered to develop that failed relationship even a little bit
It's summer, right? And they are in a place where there is low ground and standing water. You know what else is found in places with standing water? Mosquitoes - lots and lots and lots of mosquitoes But never is the little menace mentioned.
The pump shorted out. Why doesn't he pull it - presumably it is submersible - and see if he can jerry rig it.
The whole thing is likelier if both cabins are on generators, the well is shallow and the woman can't get the generator started.
The author's use of language and story telling technique are both pretty pedestrian Three stars because grade inflation exists on Literotica - two stars are reserved for really bad pieces
OH I liked this a lot, some have said how it cant happen as written but it's a story, a dam good one as well, it doesnt have to be 100% true to life.
Loved the detail and characters and of course the sex, so well described
makes it an even once, TK U MLJ LV NV............where are my comments being hidden and not put into my lists, mlj several times endquired,
Vaguewriter - this is one of the best ever Literotica stories in any category.
Brilliant character development and story line. Glad to see there is more of your works ...
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Well developed, written.
Enjoyed it greatly!
Best Do-Over Story Ever
Thoroughly enjoyed this story. It should be interesting when Leah shows up.
So well written that it was very realistic to me. I liked the character development very much and the experimentation seemed so natural. Please continue the story.
An awesome story, especially for your first. Great dialogue, story arc and character development. I’m looking forward to reading all of your other stories. 5*