All Comments on 'Doctor's Visit'

great story,looking forward to reading about the followup visit. thanks paull

Great story but the name thing at the end was off the mark. All through the story he was Mr. Sullivan and at the end he's Mister Stevenson?? lol Hope there will be a "follow up" story on the "follow up" appointment.

More please! That was an awesome, though somewhat improbable story. But then isn't that what fantasy is supposed to be? Improbable :)

What about the rectal exam? One or both should have stuck at least one finger in! The least he could do was play with her "wilkey button." A carefully inserted "social" finger would surely have helped her along. Him, too, probably....

You're right, I missed that unintentional name switch (another I had considered using) when I edited. I'll be submitting that for correction, thanks for pointing it out!

The basis of the story would have earned you a "4" but you need to learn the art of sentence flow. Your àbundant use of hyphens takes away from a very good story. That is why I rated this a "2" instead of a "4". I rarely give a "5."