by Imyourdaddy2nite
"Dear anonymous
If you think the daddy talk ruined it, that's probably because you never fucked a girl well enough to have her call you daddy."
Wow, angry retort... you have issues that need resolving
If you think the daddy talk ruined it, that's probably because you never fucked a girl well enough to have her call you daddy.
This was far too short to achieve the erotic intent of the website's name.
Why do some many stories turn weird by calling each other daddy, slut and bitch!? If you write a good heart story, that is not necessary
Too short.
Idiot, you had a story, and you made a flop
Continue, jackass
So many ways you could have extended the buildup. Or left out the last paragraph to continue with the story.
Nice concept, but you could have and should have stretched this out for a couple of chapters to entice the reader and explore the characters more.
Was a bit rushed.
Has the makings of a great story but there was no depth to it