by ribbons_on_bedposts
You've been mentioned in the New Story Reviews in the Author's Hangout.
I rarely comment on stories, but I had to comment on this one. I'm rather tired of the typical gay characters portrayed in most stories. I'm FAR more attracted to the type shown here. And the sex was hot *G* Thanks for being unique!
Please continue with this story, and keep up the good work! It sure kept me up......
omg this was really horny. i just loved the whole thing. please right some more soon.
Holy shit, r_o_b, very nicely done. Good writing, interesting characters, and intensly erotic(I'm talking involuntary muscular contractions...*wink*).
I did see a couple booboos that I would class as typos, and do have a minor issue about a certain aspect of your disctriptions (which I'll not go into here because it's a nitpicking thing that I could easily be completely wrong about, and if it's not bothered anyone else I wouldn't want to put ideas into their heads, but will be in a feedback I'll send) but that's nothing to get pissy about IMNSHO. *grin* *OY, run-on sentence anyone? *snickers@self** Neither were enough to keep me from giving you a fin.
I would most definitely like to see a continuation of Lance's story, and would seriously hope to see Luke again. I really liked him. *wink* If you don't like the idea of Lance and Luke hooking up again, maybe you could spin him off and give him his own series? *chuckles* It would be like what they do with sitcoms all the time...only naughty.
Aweseome story! Very erotic! I luv the way you integrated the slow general public teasing down to a specific personal, teasing experience while raising, heightening and detailing the level of the erotic intimacy as you went through the story. Great work, please write more!
Where is the sequel? You can't leave the story hanging like that. I'm dying to know the outcome.
you know you want to :) please, pretty please
That was so good! You are an amazing writer. I'll be looking out for a second installment.
okay so you sooo have to continue this story.Oh my gosh that was soooo good.i have to know what happens next
You really ought to consider doing another chapter for this tale - it's too well done and too good to leave it be. Either way, you should write more!
This is a HOT if improbable seduction story which is likely to be a life change for our hero. After resisting his brother's gay friend for quite a while, there suddenly is GREAT SEX, with a real suggestion of a lasting relationship. More, please!
so well written and the plot is amazing!
i love that they get caught ;) plz do another chapter
so hot hot hot
xxxxxx
I need more or I'm going to dieeee! Give me more!!! *Hunger flares in my eyes.* That's outrageously delicious writing up there. You, ribbons_on_bedposts, are a God(dess?). mwah.
i love this story. it would be awesome if there was a second part to see what happens between Luke and Lance. it could be a love story that everyone would love. the story was also very hott
greate story, hope to soon read what else happens with those 2..
I loved this story! I really want to know what happens with those 2. Please keep it going!!
Hey, I really liked your story and I am hoping you write more soon!!! It was hot!!!!
This story is fab - very well written & great characters. I'd love to read more, so I'll keep my fingers crossed for further chapters! Either way, you MUST keep writing - you are very talented :)
Gutted to see that this was written nearly 5 years ago - I was hoping for some more chapters! I really loved it, well done!
awesome. would love to see a second chapter. it was so awesome. and i repeat please write a second chapter
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Please, Oh please write more. This is a very good start, it completely drew me in and left me wanting more. Great character development and detail. The whole situation is very realistic, the way you described the buildup between the two and the nerviousness that was felt had an realism that was almost uncanny in it's depth. I would love to see where you take these two characters as well as what happens with the relationship between the brothers. You did an awsome job, please keep up the good writing.
~EnchantedGreen~
OMG!!! I love this story!!!!! Pleeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaase continue it!!!!!
That was absolutely delicious! I'm a straight girl, but I love gay stories, and this was one of the best. I soo wish you had continued it!! Brilliant, in every way. And soo freaking hot!
My goodness, your wrighting is incredible. Do continue to make these beautiful peices. A series about these two wonderful guys seems to be in order. Good luck and good wrighting!
-A friend
I thoroughly enjoyed the story, and am extremely interested in seeing it develope farther. Your writing style is amazing, and i look forward to reading more works from you in the future. <3
Haha, I like the title ! And hey, I love rimming in stories, especially like this ! Rimming IS romantic in a way ! They sound sweet and sexy together; I enjoy both of their personalities. Yes, yes and yesss, yeeeeeesss even Luke's reaction to Seth yelling was sexy, lol. Yessss
Please let there be a second chapter or a sequel!!!
Why'd ya half to cut it off so short with no promise of more?!
i have to say the strong attack on women in regards to sex was gonna get noticed and commented on...sounds like there should be more to the characters seeing as Luke seems to be already in love, when is the next posting coming through? a wonderful story.
This fic has great buildup and sensuality. The ending is a bit sudden but realistic, and I'm hoping for a sequel.
I thoroughly enjoyed this and would love if you would write more chapters
Oh my gosh. I have never in my life read gay erotica but this story changed that
for me. I like girls a lot, but this.. just wow. Please make small short stories just between the two of them. Luke & Lance only. Thank you.
It's been 13 years since you wrote and posted this? And no sequel? :-(
Beautifully written, passionately detailed, and oh so very hot!
What have you been up to - we need more!
This felt very authentic as if it really happened. I can see myself going on for pages gushing about what the two of you did here, but I'll leave it at this : Holy HELL IS THIS HOT
Holy crap and holy crap again. As a single piece this is a shocking gem, and while I add my voice to the aching others begging for more, sometimes this is all the Universe gives us and we have to just be thankful. There are many “I’m not gay/against my will” types of pieces on here, but this one just felt so right. Thank you.