All Comments on 'Dorm Room Exploration'

Hope you continue the story, brother takes care of sister

The Dom/Sub activity actually detracted from the story.

Please show us more.

I liked this but the dom/sub playing came out of nowhere and wasn't believable. I think that maybe a virgin would have had a little more trouble riding her brother's 'huge cock'. Please, please don't ever write 'I lied on my side' ever again - grammar is important! I want to be constructive in my criticism of your piece and also encourage you to continue writing - you have talent. Thank you.

Love the read! Would love to hear more. Hopefully more stories are to cum

Was enjoyable, well written.

Some says where did the dom/sub come from, it was always there and started when she was watching him, him telling her what to do, after that was just more of the same, either that or i was reading some other story !

5* cheers

Don't let people tell you the dom/sub aspect takes away from the story. For one, it's a personal favorite of mine, and secondly it's another good point of plot. If they don't like that kind of relationship then they can find another story more to their ilk.

make more of these